Writing Week 2: September 9, 2020
TUNE UP TIME:
#1
winston is one of the most laid-back people i know he is tall and
slim with black hair and he always wears a t-shirt and black jeans
his jeans have holes in them and his baseball boots are scruffy too
he usually sits at the back of the class and he often seems to be
asleep however when the exam results are given out he always
gets an "A" i don't think hes as lazy as he appears to be
(http://web.uvic.ca/lancenrd/martin/weblang/weblang15.htm)
#2
the safari park is thriving everyone is really happy the weather is amazing we have sunny
days and high temperatures the cafés ice cream is really popular we are close to the
middle of july july and august always bring more children children make ideal visitors
they pay attention to the animals and they eat a lot our caring keeper has had a
wonderful idea he is teaching the monkeys new exercises if he is successful there will be
many benefits our customers the visitors will gain pleasure the monkeys his pupils will
have fun john the keeper may win an award however small
(https://images.scholastic.co.uk/assets/a/cd/4b/je09-punctuation-onlines-2-337220.pdf)
REWRITE:
RESOURCES FOR THIS WEEK: VOICE
#1
winston is one of the most laid-back people i know he is tall and
slim with black hair and he always wears a t-shirt and black jeans
his jeans have holes in them and his baseball boots are scruffy too
he usually sits at the back of the class and he often seems to be
asleep however when the exam results are given out he always
gets an "A" i don't think hes as lazy as he appears to be
(http://web.uvic.ca/lancenrd/martin/weblang/weblang15.htm)
#2
the safari park is thriving everyone is really happy the weather is amazing we have sunny
days and high temperatures the cafés ice cream is really popular we are close to the
middle of july july and august always bring more children children make ideal visitors
they pay attention to the animals and they eat a lot our caring keeper has had a
wonderful idea he is teaching the monkeys new exercises if he is successful there will be
many benefits our customers the visitors will gain pleasure the monkeys his pupils will
have fun john the keeper may win an award however small
(https://images.scholastic.co.uk/assets/a/cd/4b/je09-punctuation-onlines-2-337220.pdf)
REWRITE:
RESOURCES FOR THIS WEEK: VOICE
HOMEWORK:
Journal of your choice using someone or something else’s perspective with strong voice.
Journal of your choice using someone or something else’s perspective with strong voice.
- 7th Grade and Above: a page or more
- 6th Grade and Below: half a page or more
